Here's a scene from the new version of Bird. I wrote this today at work so it's a little rough. This is where Ellie meets another person that's cursed. I’d never seen a curse quite so large or complex. It seemed to originate at his throat and spread from there. Several tendrils disappeared beneath the collar of his white shirt. More of it crawled up the left side of his face, covering one eye. It turned that eye completely black leaving the other a pleasant shade of ocean green. Curses were supposed to scar the bearer, make them ugly and undesirable—but Tram’s curse—it only made him more handsome. And right now I couldn’t seem to take my eyes off him. | |
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I'm working on that Victorian fantasy I talked about forever ago. Well, I guess I can't say I'm working on it so much as I'm toying with it.
Here's the opening paragraph:
Ellie rubbed the curse mark on the underside of her wrist. It appeared on her thirteenth birthday, a sure sign she’d inherited the curse through family lineage. It wasn’t her fault, but people looked at her like she deserved the curse, like it was a punishment for some terrible deed. When in fact, she had no idea where the curse had come from. Neither did her parents. | |
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I've been working on the Possession revision slowly but surely. I got a lot done this weekend, but yesterday? I rearranged two paragraphs and wrote enough fresh material to fill a teaspoon. But maybe that's for the better. Maybe taking my time on this revision instead of speeding through it will make the book a million times better. I can hope, right? And to celebrate my slow but steady progress, I think I'll post a teaser. This was something I wrote over the weekend. It's a completely new scene to the book. A lot is changing. Even Kahne and Ashley feel different, though I'm having a hard time determining whether or not that change is for the better. Enough talking from me! **I trimmed it down a bit because it was too lenghty! But I wanted to get all the good bits in there. :) Kahne grabbed the TV remote, dropped it on the floor and crushed it beneath a heavy leather boot. “Hey!” Ashley said. “Watch.” Within seconds, the plastic hissed and popped letting loose a cloud of thick, black smoke. She wrinkled her nose, expecting the smoke to smell acrid. Instead, it smelled like vanilla and black berries. “What was that?” she asked. “A witch spell.” She rolled her eyes. “Yeah right.” “You believe I’m a damned spirit possessing your best friend, don’t you? A witch is more believable, I would think.” Well, when he put it that way… She changed the subject. “How did you know the remote was spelled?” He went back to the window, pushing it shut. “The smoke you saw? That was magic. And it smells like a witch in here.” “Why would a witch spell my remote?” He double-checked the locks on the window, pushing up on the frame testing its purchase. “I wouldn’t know. I’m not a witch, after all.” There was something wrong with this situation—her taking the spell and the topic of witches with so little reluctance. If Kahne told her Jesus was real and that the Holy Grail existed, would she believe that too? She just might, because if demons and witches were real, maybe everything else was too. “What are you thinking about?” he asked suddenly. The question stood in the room between them like some unfitting statue. Ashley stayed up against the wall farthest from him. “I’m just wondering why you’re here.” “I came to bring you something.” He nodded at her dresser. Somehow, she’d missed the small purple box when she first came in the room. Now, she took it in her hands, eyeing Kahne. What if this was another trap? “Go ahead,” he said. “It’s for your protection.” | |
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I didn't see many Teaser Tuesday posts today. Where is everybody?! I posted the opening to this project a while back. I set it aside having no idea what I was going to do with it. Well, I *think* I have it, but that could change. Here's a bit more after that initial opening. I was not in my room, but a room the size of an auditorium with three metal walls the color of brass and one wall of blue. It was just me in that room. Me and the bed. I threw aside the sheets, put bare feet to the cold metal floor. Standing, a white nightgown unfolded behind me, dragging over the floor. I went to the wall of blue, pushed my fingers against it. It was entirely glass. “It’s the Window Sea.” The voice startled me and I whirled around, the nightgown catching at my calves. The man standing there was little older than me. Maybe twenty or twenty-one. He was pale, not sickly like, but cold-like. His eyes were like that too, blue and cold in color, but not in character. “Um…” My voice came out hoarse, shaky. I cleared my throat. “I’ve never heard of the Window Sea,” I said. “And where am I, exactly?” “You died,” he said. “Don’t you remember?” | |
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It's been a while since I posted on Teaser Tuesday. I've been working full-time since I started at the bank. I'll go to part-time after the holidays. Anyway, I haven't written much either, but I fantasize about it! I've been playing around with a lot of stuff, in particular that project I started on a Sunday afternoon after watching the movie Macbeth. The one about death. Here's some more of what I wrote after that opening scene, condensed so that it's not too long. I scanned the street beyond the shooter, hoped for someone to saunter past, to save me because I couldn’t save myself. And then Crowe Santos appeared, suddenly, like an afterthought brought on by the wind. He withdrew a gun from his leather jacket, pulled the trigger. The bullet popped from it's chamber. Blood splattered across my face. I flinched and when I opened my eyes, my would-be attacker was face down on the sidewalk. “Are you all right?” Crowe asked, but it didn’t sound like he truly cared. I nodded a lie. I was far from okay. “Go home, Janie,” he said. “Clean yourself up. Forget this night.” “Okay,” I answered. I would never forget that night for as long as I lived. | |
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The writing break went well! I think I needed it anyway, considering I was starting a new job. After overloading my brain with all these new bank rules, it was nice to come home and just surf the Internet or sit down with a book. I finished Bloom, as I said and started Vampirates and Story of a Girl, which the library FINALLY got in. I was bugging them weekly. They're probably happy to get rid of me!
I also watched lots of TV and some movies. I watched an Australian indie remake of Macbeth. I love Australian indies. Ever seen Somersault? SO GOOD. The guy who played Macbeth in the remake was a main character in Somersault. His name is Sam Worthington and he is so yumm. He's been cast in James Cameron's new sci-fi movie, Avatar, so I think we'll be seeing more of him in the US.
After watching Macbeth, I was instantly inspired to open a new document in Word and just started writing. The thing with Australian indies, they have this haunting quality, quiet and poetic. I just love them. At least the ones I've watched and perhaps it's true too for US indies, but I haven't seen many to know.
Anyway, here's what I just wrote and I love it. It felt so good to stretch that writing muscle after a week or so! That really isn't long at all, but, whatever. For me it is!
This is a story of death. Of the literal and figurative sense. Because I saw them dead and because I am not the same as I was when this story started. Where did it start, exactly? Where all stories start. On a day. On a day that began like any day. Perhaps it was a Thursday though I can’t remember clearly. After the beginning, the titles of the day blurred together like lights outside a carousel. They were just a flash of golden smudged against the darkness. But on that day, I twisted shut the lock on the front door of my father’s chocolate shop and that was where the ordinary ended. It was a distinct end, an audible click in the night. The next sound that reached me, carried on the crisp cool wind of autumn, was a gunshot.
(And since this is technically a teaser, consider it my teaser for Tuesday. I'll be working all day Tuesday, so I won't post.) | |
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With AA out there and Possession still under consideration, I thought it was time to take a break ( a little break). I've been reading more. I read Nickel and Dimed over the weekend. I just started Midnighters yesterday and really like it so far. I'm about halfway through A Great and Terrible Beauty. I'm on week four with that book now. It's not as terrible as I thought, but it's not exactly capturing my attention either. I mean, it's good. I particularly LOVE Gemma's voice, but nothing seems to be happening to keep me reading. Anyway, I've been working slowly on the Victorian Fantasy. In the last week, I added another 1,000 words to it. I've also started about four other new WIP! I just like playing with new things and I think it'll be good for me. Here's a piece of another sci-fi YA: (inspired by my car-deer accident, no doubt!)
They found the BMW bent around a tree, a deer injured at the roadside.
My mother loved deer. She had an odd talent of summoning animals. They gathered wherever she was. Maybe that deer, that night, had sensed her. Or maybe he’d just been running scared from something else. It didn’t matter now. The deer was dead. So was my mother. (Notice how it's in first person. It's very weird, considering I haven't revisited first person since last summer when I wrote Possession. For some reason, this book just *wanted* to be in first.) | |
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No matter how much I want to focus on just one genre, I'm always pulled into a WIP of the other genre. I had good intentions of focusing on another contemporary YA in the vein of AA, but with the disaster that is the query process of AA, I got all sad and started something new. Here's a piece of the new WIP, Rook, a YA contemporary sci-fi. There was something odd about him. He didn’t fit. And when she took in a breath, he was gone. Brenna turned, scanned the faces around her. She made a complete circle before she found him again. He was across the street in the grassy park amongst the picnic tables and cemented grills. He’d some how accumulated a group of people in the two seconds it’d taken Brenna to find him. There had to be six or seven people, all wearing some shade of black that nearly melted into the darkness. Brenna ran across the street, driven by sheer adrenaline and marvel. When she reached the dew-soaked lawn, the group stopped together like a pack of wolves communicating on some level that Brenna couldn’t hear or understand. But just one turned to look at her. Him. | |
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I don't have anything good for Teaser Tuesday because I've been working on AA and nothing else. I was going to post an excerpt from my old journals like westlund_lang has been, but I packed most of my journals up and the one I could find was quite tragically immature. So instead, I'm going to post an excerpt from an old WIP that I wrote in ninth or tenth grade. It's about vampires. Everything I wrote back then was about vampires. I was obsessed. -------------------------------------- I could smell the body. It was in one of the VIP rooms and Shane was near it. I passed the dance floor, the DJ station and the bathrooms. The hallway to the VIP rooms was sanctioned off with only a curtain of beads. I walked through it, the beads clicking as they shut behind me. "Hey, Ice," Shane said. (Seriously, Ice? Where did I get these names?) "Hey." Shane was bent over the body with a clothes pin on his nose. I wanted to ask him if it hurt, but there were more important questions to ask. I shut down my vampire scent and bent over Shane. Becky was unidentifiable by now. It didn't take long for vampires to decay. An hour. Two hours tops. Too bad they didn't really turn to ash like they did in the movies. | |
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"The Willow and the Wrath" just isn't cutting it. janetgurtler pointed out---after reading the book---that the title didn't seem to fit and I have to agree. I mean, I really like "The Willow and the Wrath" but I'm not sure it says what I want it to say about the book. I've been contemplating new titles all weekend. I think I'll be ready to submit queries in one-two week's time and I want to be sure I have a good title to go with the query. And, some how in the span of the revision, WW's story became more Redd's story than Anna's. And one of the major elements of his POV is his art. I'd love to get that in the title somewhere. So, maybe... The Art of HerWhat do you think? Of course, if you all can think of something much better than this, I'd love you forever!! I'm not very good with titles, I've come to realize. In other news, I came up with a new book idea this weekend. The idea started like this: There were ten of them. Mom. Dad. Eight kids. I think the idea came from an article I read the other day about a really large family and I started wondering what it'd be like to have such a large family. But then the idea morphed from this point to something else entirely and I really like the direction it's taking. I wrote about two pages late last night. It's hard to say where I'll go once I start subbing WW and can finally focus on something else. I'd like to choose between three projects. This new one about the huge family, the one about Tristan Van Port (the criminal genius) or a third project I have about three pages on. I like them all and it might take a bit more exploration with all three to decide. | |
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