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12th-Feb-2008 05:55 pm
Winter
I didn't see many Teaser Tuesday posts today. Where is everybody?!

I posted the opening to this project a while back. I set it aside having no idea what I was going to do with it. Well, I *think* I have it, but that could change. Here's a bit more after that initial opening. 

I was not in my room, but a room the size of an auditorium with three metal walls the color of brass and one wall of blue.

It was just me in that room. Me and the bed.

I threw aside the sheets, put bare feet to the cold metal floor. Standing, a white nightgown unfolded behind me, dragging over the floor.

I went to the wall of blue, pushed my fingers against it. It was entirely glass.

“It’s the Window Sea.”

The voice startled me and I whirled around, the nightgown catching at my calves.

The man standing there was little older than me. Maybe twenty or twenty-one. He was pale, not sickly like, but cold-like. His eyes were like that too, blue and cold in color, but not in character.

“Um…” My voice came out hoarse, shaky. I cleared my throat. “I’ve never heard of the Window Sea,” I said. “And where am I, exactly?”

“You died,” he said. “Don’t you remember?”

Comments 
12th-Feb-2008 11:47 pm (UTC)
The last line is definitely teasery. I especially love how you describe his eyes as "blue and cold in color, but not in character." I want to read more. :)

I haven't posted for Teaser Tuesday in...a long time. Heh. Maybe next week.
12th-Feb-2008 11:55 pm (UTC)
Nice, Jen -- how lovely to see a post by you :)
13th-Feb-2008 12:08 am (UTC)
Glad to see you still working on these things! And your teaser is intriguing as usual.
13th-Feb-2008 01:51 am (UTC)
All right, you roped me in. I teased on Tuesday.

Intriguing teaser you've got here. Good luck onward!
13th-Feb-2008 05:08 pm (UTC)
I like your teaser. The bare feet to the cold metal floor reminds me of swimming here in Iceland. :)

I've never posted a teaser, yet. Someday.
14th-Feb-2008 10:24 pm (UTC)
I still like the voice in this one and the way you set the scenes. Keep going!!! I really want to find out what happens next.

Maybe you could write James McAvoy into this one. Maybe he could be the ghost guy in the room, although I don't know if he has blue eyes.

I think I could like this more than the original SS, and you know how much I like that ...

p.s. When will we find out what the chocolate shop has to do with anything? Or is it nothing and I'm just having a chocolate craving? ;)
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